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Mother and Old Man Winter by `Memnalar:iconMemnalar:



Folk called him Old Man Winter, the hills of Grey were his home,
He hated the hearts of mortals, forbade them his hills to roam,
His breath was a storm of black frost, leaving aught but death in its path,
And his touch bore the chill of the boneyard,
    Boneyard, boneyard
His touch bore the chill of the boneyard, his eyes white with ageless wrath.

It was the last night of Winter, the snows of Grey fell thick.
Two faced the winds and the darkness, their horse had fallen sick.
A young lad and his mother, hardly past her maidenhead,
She and her boy fled southward,
   Southward, southward
She and her boy fled southward, from a man she could not wed.

‘I’ll flay their fair skin from them,’ the Old Man raged from his peak,
He clawed with icy fingers, until their legs grew weak.
The boy turned blue with shivers, his mother she feared for the worst,
She held the boy close to her breast,
   Her breast, her breast
She held the boy close to her breast, and endured the Old Man’s curse.

‘They’ll never see their home again,’ the Old Man seethed through his teeth
‘I’ll burn their eyes with driven snow, blind them to the embrace of death!’
The boy a’feared the white and the wind, he cried as a child alone,
She closed his eyes with her soft hands
  Soft hands, soft hands
She closed his eyes with her soft hands, until her fingers grew numb to the bone.

The Old Man’s cold knifed through their cloaks, under their furs like a snake
‘Their fingers will soon fall off from chill, a trail of bones in their wake!’
The boy’s hands were white, his fingers held fast, might never move again,
She warmed his hands in her mouth,
  Her mouth, her mouth
She warmed his hands in her mouth, as her feet held stiff with strain.

The Old Man’s scorn and fury fell, like a mountain upon them both
‘You’ll never leave my hills alive,’ he shrieked, a godling mad with wroth
The boy went limp, his lips were dark, but Mother did not break
She bundled him up with her own warmth
   Her warmth, her warmth
She bundled him up with her own warmth, through that last night of winter bleak.

Long came the dawn, and sun and gold, the Old Man forced away.
Spring came riding a gentle horse, astride the break of day.
The boy awoke, and spied the sun, and shook Mother with joy.
She lay still through his earnest pleas,
   His pleas, his pleas
She lay still through his earnest pleas, she gave all she had to the boy.
©2009 `Memnalar
:iconmemnalar:

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Somewhere, one of the nuns begins to sing. One by one, the mounted Swordsworn Sisters join the chorus. It is a song they have all known since their girlhoods within the Bastion’s walls. [link]

Some of you asked for this a long time ago. It's not much, and this sort of thing doesn't come easy to me, but I felt I owed you this much. Please help me improve it.

Inspired by Loreena McKennitt's version of Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman. All my respect to you poets and songwriters out there. This stuff is hard.

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:iconaranov:
I love The Highwayman...

You've really got Noyes' steady rhythm down- aw, dang it, now I'm going to have it stuck in my head... Anyway, love it. Ballads are wonderful things, and this one certainly fits right in with the best of them, tragic ending and all. (The story reminds me vaguely of Edna St Vincent Millay's Ballad of the Harp Weaver, if you're familiar with it.) I think I need to learn this and sing it incessantly and ... ok, I'll stop. But it would be easier to learn than The Highwayman. It's shorter. ;)

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I'm not cheating! I choose to look at it as utilizing all available resources.

My other transport is a Gladiator-class.
:iconmemnalar:
Not sure about "the best of them," but thank you for being kind. I've had a lot of false starts with this thing, and almost gave up on it many times.

I'll go looking for the Ballad of the Harp Weaver.
:iconfaeriecrone:
I like the theme/plot.
I like the rhythm.
I wonder if it would have more power if the repeated words created a greater symbolic message? For example ... each one moving from first around the pair, then traveling up the mother's body towards her heart until she gave even that?

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Artists are magical helpers. Evoking symbols and motifs that connect us to our deeper selves, they can help us along the heroic journey of our own lives.
Joseph Campbell
:iconaranov:
I'm glad you didn't give up. I do love a good ballad.

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I'm not cheating! I choose to look at it as utilizing all available resources.

My other transport is a Gladiator-class.
:iconkira-kunoichi:
It has good strength behind it, but I think it could use a bit of polishing for it to be really powerful. Some of the rhymes could use a bit of work... I'm sorry, but I can't give any specific advice on that. Poetry isn't really my forte.

There's just grammatical change I would make:
"They’ll never see their home again, the Old Man seethed through his teeth
I’ll burn their eyes with driven snow, blind them to the embrace of death!"
You have everything else that the Old Man says in quotation marks, but not this. I don't know if you have a stylistic reason for this... but I think it would look better if it was like the rest.

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I cannot put my finger on it now/The child is gone the dream is gone

-Pink Floyd
:iconmemnalar:
Hmm, do you mean the repetitions like "her mouth, her mouth," and so on?
:iconmemnalar:
No worries, poetry isn't even close to my forte either. :) Yes, it's very rough as-is. There are parts I really like, and others that I'm not sure about. I may put this into scraps in the near future, but I wanted to get some comments on it first.

Good catch on the quotes; that's a good old-fashioned oversight.
:iconkira-kunoichi:
Rough as it may be, it's certainly interesting to see another bit of culture attached to the Two Paths saga.

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I cannot put my finger on it now/The child is gone the dream is gone

-Pink Floyd
:iconmemnalar:
Heh. Eventually, I'd like to write Migyen's Voyage, the play that Feret and company are supposed to perform in Elsagrod. Kinda curious as to what that story is about. :D

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